0001F2021/01/22(金) 23:26:00.33ID:ex0JIVuu 設問 These days some people don’t have a television at home. Do you think the number of such people will increase in the future?
I think that the number of the people don’t have a television at home will increase in the future. First, we can enjoy entertainment by watching internet video sites. That is more convenient because we can enjoy it when and where we want to do. Second, we can get information from SNS today. That enable to see many opinions so we can get information impartially. It is for these reasons that the number of people don’t have a television at home will increase in the future.
0002名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:34:54.39ID:fKk5/Shm 同じ表現は自由英作文の場合使わないほうがいいね 例えばenjoy~とかget informationとか あと結論も同じの使うと確実に減点される これだと表現点があんまり来ないと思う 0003名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:36:57.69ID:vfiVsAuy 自由英作文はサービス問題 0004名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:37:17.88ID:Y4uufa+m そんなことより俺のどうていチ○ポに変なイボできてんだけど、まじで助けて 0005名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:37:53.22ID:ex0JIVuu ちなみにこれ英検二級 同日模試でR79点取れたから余裕だと思ったら打ちのめされてる 0006名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:39:23.79ID:y30AX2kJ that enables us toの方がいいと思いました。 0007名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:39:58.35ID:y30AX2kJ ちな英検準一級のライティング満点 0008名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:42:59.37ID:6iUdj0US enable us to seeの方がよくね 後結論の文は序文と同じこと書いたらダメだよ ちょっと言い換えたやつじゃないと減点されると思う 0009名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:47:29.23ID:n5c2Zz+M 添削します 加筆・修正が必要な箇所は《》で囲った
> > I think that the number of the people 《who》don’t have a television at home will increase in the future. 《I have two reasons.》First, we can enjoy entertainment by watching internet video sites. 《These are》more convenient because we can enjoy 《them》《anytime and anywhere》. Second, we can get information from SNS today. 《It》 《enables》《us》 to see many opinions so we can get information impartially. It is for these reasons that 《More and more people will not have any television in the future.》
最初の文と最後の文が全く同じ文だと、字数稼ぎだとみなされて減点される可能性があるから、パラフレーズ(言い換え)をした方がいいよ 0010名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:52:30.92ID:I5JpSmWz The number of people who don't where we want do it That enables us to do 直すならこの辺じゃないか 0011名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:53:59.52ID:I5JpSmWz grammarっていう英文校正アプリがあるんだけど使ってみたら良いんじゃないすかね 0012名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:56:02.51ID:I5JpSmWz grammarlyだったわごめん 英検2級ぐらいなら文法ミスがなけりゃ高得点出るだろ多分 0013名無しなのに合格2021/01/22(金) 23:59:11.36ID:vRob/Uas>>9 すげえ 0014名無しなのに合格2021/01/23(土) 00:00:19.43ID:/0oaOBVy すげえなあ 0015名無しなのに合格2021/01/23(土) 02:17:18.47ID:R8iUHXYP 設問がDo you think〜？の場合でもI thinkで始めない方がいいと思うんだけど、どうかね 0016名無しなのに合格2021/01/23(土) 02:23:00.71ID:oc75cxzp 汚い＝悪質＝上智＝卑しい
The number of the people who don’t have a television at home will increase in the future. There are two reasons for this. One of them is that people can enjoy entertainment by watching internet video sites. These are more convenient because we can enjoy them anytime and anywhere. The other is that people can get information from SNS today. It enables us to see many opinions so we can get information impartially. It is for these reasons that More and more people will not have any television in the future. 0018名無しなのに合格2021/01/23(土) 02:35:23.68ID:b3R0Mu7y みんなありがとう 0019名無しなのに合格2021/01/23(土) 10:43:58.83ID:/gg1GWOg these areってあまりみないような。 商品説明とか化合物とか物に着目してる感。
